Tonight at dVersePoets, we have been encouraged to write in a particular welsh form (of which there are variants). For further explanation, refer to Wikipedia.
I wrote three of these difficult little things ages ago, and figured I’d post them. In the third note to keep in spirit with the subject matter, I reversed the consonant string alliteration..
Kiss Spontaneous
Were we our love to define, lust is lost.
Let us last, kiss me fine.
Praise me, press my mouth on thine.
Bouquets bequeath, be thou mine!
Pacific Innocence
O my friend fair needs to be in embrace.
My brave heart! Love, hear me:
“Let us sit on sand and see
Love let run to eternity.”
Outcry
Gasp! It rips. spirit breaking – He curses,
As she cries with shaking.
Scrapes scar much stomach kicking,
Wombs of women whimpering.
wow that last one is intense…really nicely done on it…and the middle one though, love it…and letting love run into eternity….pretty cool how each of these is very differnt….i like…
I still love how the last two lines of the second one just flow right off the tongue.. π
Thanks Brian.
Wow! Wow and Wow! … I really liked this one. Loved Kiss spontaneous the most! π
Glad you liked them.
Wow, you have the form perfect I think, it’s easier to see when it’s done well like this. I love ‘Pacific Innocence’ – these are my favourites so far with this form. kudos
Thanks, glad you enjoyed!
I liked all three and that you attacked the form in each case and triumphed. Quite a tour de force. Really well done!
Thanks !
These are very good. I like the second one the best. β€
thanks Dianna.
I love your voice. These are excellent.
I’ve never seen a womb whimper! π
…my brave heart, indeed!!
thanks for the visit!