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Anarchy, freedom, Jolly Roger, liberty, piracy, Poem, Poetry, Responsibility
(a Piece of Eight poem..compare to the first to find the hidden structure.. included below )
If asked on why I, struggling, write
this piece of gold, hold fast and see
within these words, demand respite
with liberties and regard free
the crossing brand teased line by line,
reprimanding those leisured kept
to stand more true in wild seas’ clime
and leave the admiralty bereft.
( The first one, proof of concept, and a bit rougher..
Nautical Bones
Avast! To dye my colors true
and ring the bell, well for me sake,
I’m calling liberty to make
me brother’s bring the grimsome hue
To cross the sea, fling white my head
to fiercely fly o’er sting of pain
and see to end enslaving gain
and weigh the anchor free instead.)
Also posted for open link night over at DversePoets.
smiles..maybe i get this wrong but writing sometimes feels much like a pirate adventure out on a ship with blown sails, black flag, wild sea with a sword in hand an a song of freedom on the lips…maybe that’s just how my mind works…so..smiles
ha some interesting parallels between the two…i rather like the language used…it did make me think as claudia of pirates….the last four lines of the second one make this for me….cool rhtyhm…
Loved the undertones! Don’t we all just want to be free fish? 😉
You write like a poet of old…beautiful
I am still trying to understand…beautifully worded, has a classsical sound…but the density of meaning eludes me.
Rich with expert use of dialect. I strive for freedom but flounder. I guess I’m not a strong swimmer. Beautiful work, Zane
absolutely beautiful and deeply poetic.
All poems are pirates at sea having a whale of a good time with words. Keep those poetic anchors weighed!
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