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cinquain, introspection, Nature, Poem, Poetry, Robert Frost, snow
Timeless,
Snow-drifting-woods,
Horse staying, burdened man,
Darkness sifted with promises,
to keep.
( A cinquain written for Form For All at DversePoets)
Frost Grounded
14 Thursday Mar 2013
Posted in Poetry
This is beautiful, and it evokes Robert Frost as well!
There are few poems out there that evoke timelessness as well as the one inspiring this poem.. 🙂
really cool elements to this..between the snowy woods and the horse it is a wonderful scene for me…darkness sifted with promise is a killer line though…
“to keep” is so powerful
Snow in the woods & the burdened man are my favorite parts ~ Cheers ~
This was excellent:
“Darkness sifted with promises,”
the rest was merely great.
Merely great…worded so well..glad you enjoyed it.
The setting, and then the burden – great.
beautiful!
you’re a Robert Frost! BEAUTIFUL !
First thing I thought … abbreviated Frost. 🙂
I saw Mary mentioned Robert Frost already and that was my first thought as well… I like it a lot.
..darkness sifted with promises… —- i liked that… it adds deepness to the mystery of the woods… smiles…
“darkness sifted with promises” – I could spend hours simply savouring that thought. This is a fabulous response to my prompt. Thank you.
No problem..It is difficult to put the whole thing into three form…I did the same with Frost’s “the Road Not Taken”a few days later.
Damn I wished I got it — so many seemed too.
I like the phrases.
I envision a man who burdened a horse with harsh load now stuck in the woods and the horse won’t move — they will both die in the darkness. Decay into timelessness — sifted through forgetfulness and not kept at all.
But I am sure that was not your intent.
[following – any hints? I looked at your tags — maybe I need to know Frost]
It is sort of a rewrite of Frost’s “Stopping by Woods on a Snowy Evening” into the cinquain form…I may try doing his most famous poem like this as well, but the form may be too tight for it.. thanks for reading and commenting, my friend.
Ah, I see. Frost’s poem is clear to me and beautiful.
When making allusions to an elite crowd, you may want to supply a footnote or link for us plebeians who try and read.
Thanx
The Frost poem is beautiful, and why I used it. I’ll try to link better on my allusions.. I mean to link on Erehwon on that one poem. You got that while many didn’t.